My daughter did another lesson on writing to a prompt today and ended up with another adorable piece of work. She did much better on focusing on the topic today than with the one she finished yesterday, and had fewer errors. She had trouble with misspelling words and a little trouble with run-on sentences but these are consistent weaknesses that we are working on. The ideas and the expression of though are marvelous, though, as always, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
Her prompt today was:
If you could be any animal, which animal would you be and why?
Here is her paper:
If I were an animal I would certainly be an elephant. Why is that, you say? Because an elephant is strong. It has the strength to lift up a full grown male human. It can even rip off a thick branch right from the tree!
Another reason why is because the elephant has pads on its feet so it walks quietly. But when an elephant stomps, another elephant can hear the sound waves through the ground. Here is an example: when a child elephant is playing and his mother is in trouble, the child can hear the stomps and comes to the rescue!
Another reason is because they can fight off predators like hyenas and lions with their scary tusks and large size. So that is why I want to be an elephant.
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I corrected her spelling as I was typing and when I was reviewing her paper with her I made a few grammatical corrections, especially in the final paragraph. (She got lazy it looked like, and was sloppy in her sentence construction.) Her thought process is precious and the way she expresses herself in her writing is very engaging to say the least!
Tuesday, March 8, 2011
Monday, March 7, 2011
Writing to a Prompt: Jehovah is My Hero
My daughter has been working on writing to prompts. I'm really proud of the topic she chose for the paper she finished today. I did not help her with choosing a topic at all. The prompt was:
Who is your hero? Tell why that person is your hero.
I would have thought she would have chosen her dad or maybe Niki Manaj. LOL But she chose someone even more important.
She worked on this quite a bit as she had way too many details that didn't really fit in with the topic. Here is her finished version.
JEHOVAH IS MY HERO
Jehovah God is my hero, because he made the earth exactly right for us to live on. Do you want to know how Jehovah made the earth? Well of course you do. Jehovah put the earth exactly where we can survive. You see, if the earth were just an inch closer to the sun it would be scorching hot. If it was just another inch further away from the sun it would be too cold for us. So God put the earth in the perfect position.
Now I'm going to tell you why people are imperfect. Once there were some perfect people named Adam and Eve. Eve was at the forbidden tree and a snake came down to her and said, "Eat the fruit and you will become like God." Eve quickly took two pieces of fruit and ran to Adam. She said "Try some," so Adam tried some. They soon noticed they were naked, and they ran from Jehovah when he said "Adam, where are you." "I am behind a tree," said Adam, "because I am naked." Jehovah said "WHY HAVE YOU EATEN FROM THE FORBIDDEN TREE!" "Eve made it look so delicious." Jehovah said, "Eve, you have given Adam forbidden fruit. So I will increase the pain of your labor and you will grow old and die."
But you shouldn't worry, because Jehovah will restore the earth and everyone will be perfect.
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I tried to type it exactly as she wrote it. I did leave out the few spelling errors but put the quotation marks exactly as she wrote them since she just studied that. As you can imagine I was laughing quite a bit as I was typing it. I adore the way she puts things and the way her mind works when she is writing.
Who is your hero? Tell why that person is your hero.
I would have thought she would have chosen her dad or maybe Niki Manaj. LOL But she chose someone even more important.
She worked on this quite a bit as she had way too many details that didn't really fit in with the topic. Here is her finished version.
JEHOVAH IS MY HERO
Jehovah God is my hero, because he made the earth exactly right for us to live on. Do you want to know how Jehovah made the earth? Well of course you do. Jehovah put the earth exactly where we can survive. You see, if the earth were just an inch closer to the sun it would be scorching hot. If it was just another inch further away from the sun it would be too cold for us. So God put the earth in the perfect position.
Now I'm going to tell you why people are imperfect. Once there were some perfect people named Adam and Eve. Eve was at the forbidden tree and a snake came down to her and said, "Eat the fruit and you will become like God." Eve quickly took two pieces of fruit and ran to Adam. She said "Try some," so Adam tried some. They soon noticed they were naked, and they ran from Jehovah when he said "Adam, where are you." "I am behind a tree," said Adam, "because I am naked." Jehovah said "WHY HAVE YOU EATEN FROM THE FORBIDDEN TREE!" "Eve made it look so delicious." Jehovah said, "Eve, you have given Adam forbidden fruit. So I will increase the pain of your labor and you will grow old and die."
But you shouldn't worry, because Jehovah will restore the earth and everyone will be perfect.
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I tried to type it exactly as she wrote it. I did leave out the few spelling errors but put the quotation marks exactly as she wrote them since she just studied that. As you can imagine I was laughing quite a bit as I was typing it. I adore the way she puts things and the way her mind works when she is writing.
Wednesday, February 9, 2011
Science experiments
My daughter loves the ARVA science experiments. I'm not so keen on them but she's a scientist at heart and loves to make the messes. Here she is with a modeling clay model of an oxygen atom she made yesterday.
She took modeling clay and made 8 blue balls and 8 green balls for the protons and neutrons, and wrapped them up in plastic wrap to represent the nucleus. Then she made 8 small yellow balls and attached them with toothpicks to represent the electrons surrounding the nucleus.
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